Planet war

In a far  galaxy lives a king, a lizard king called Corvak  and his friend Benkey the talking dog. They both live on Loosker  a black and red planet  what’s as hot as the sun. But on an other  planet called Bluesker  his evil brother Borvak was ploting a plan to invade his brothers planet. Every day Covack and Benkey were visiting they lizard base also known as the army base to train them and talk but benkey Mostly went they for the food but he had to train the dog part of the army what are his brothers and sisters that didn’t get picked by the king when he was a kid. The king and benkey had been friends since when the king was a 3 year old prince but his mum and dad died in a war against corvacks brother borvack  so corvack was crowned king of his dads planet loosakeyer and  borvacks mum was king of bluesker and borvack got crowned king of that planet but corvack didn’t care. While corvack and benkey  was training the army they heard a big, loud and violent noise  far away …

Corvack, Benkey and all the army ran to the place were the noise came from. When they got their they stood in front of a large hole looking at one of Corvacks brothers army space ships with his brother  in it saying that he declares war with his brother on the planet that every one has their wars on called planet of the wars. So Corvack agreed to the deal that if Corvack killed Borvack he will get Bluesker and if Borvack kills Corvack Borvack gets Looskyer but if one wins their get both bluesker and looskyer but if both die it will go to one of there talking or it will go to corvacks and borvacks younger brother sorvack  what rules his own planet.

so Corvack and his army got to planet of the wars then Borvack and his army turned up. Before the war started Corvack and Borvack shook hands then went back to their army’s to make their plans for the war. Then their started war for the next 25 years then stopped because everyone was tied and the rule was when one team was tied they had to stop for a year or two years so Corvack and his army went back to looskyer  to train and train for a year then went back to planet of the wars to start the war for another 24 and a half years because half way through the 25 year corvacks wife had a baby so Corvack ran at his brother and  killed him so he ended the war with half of his army then went to bluesker and got crowned the king then went back to looskyer to see his new son and called his son norvack and said he is the second most important person on bluesker and looskyer because he’s the most important person. But 33 years later he died

 

Some good characters, Corey and I like the fact you have chosen a sci-fi tory to write.  Make sure each sentence is punctuated and read through, making sure your spellings are correct too.  Try using description to develop your characters and settings too.