Tag: #StaySafe

DrawWorks Pitch

By 13daivamr

           DrawWorks Pitch

In 2020, family became an integral part of our lives: locked inside with your loved ones; makingnew wonderful memories; unable to buy decorations your house. Are you missing on this?

If yes, the answer is right in front of you! Luckily for you, DrawWorks provides hand-drawn portraits of your family. Expensive, time-wasting and ancient – this is not what the future of portraits hold. Our company does not support this and we are here to guide you on a journey of inspiration. DrawWorks, which is a brand new company, is the answer to the problem you did not know you had! Before you continue, ask yourself – Are you ready to see what true creativity looks like?

DrawWorks proudly provides personalised portraits of your family and friends, as to use as a special memory. Since shops have opened for only essential items, art has become nonexistent. Our company offers hand-drawn portraits of your choice; it does not matter what it is, we will do it! This perfect place is always located near the River Ouse, for the best views, while you sit back and relax while your picture is being drawn. Some people may want a portrait for themselves; others will buy a portrait for the whole family to send to relatives on the other side of the world. This all is possible with the small fee of £3! This is not only cheap, but affordable.

In the future, I plan to extend DrawWorks to outstanding heights. This all can happen by building more DrawWorks stations, decreasing the time it takes for a portrait and online/delivery services. DrawWorks plans to expand, not only in the UK, but the world! Unfortunately, this company can not continue without you. Buying our portraits, where 10% of our profit goes to NHS, will make our dreams to break free. I know that this small company can grow  your help, as everything works with a little push. If you are as invested in this as I am, if you know that that everything works with a little push, then DrawWorks is the choice for you. Thank you for taking your time to read this.

 

Well done Daivam. A beautifully written pitch with clear intentions. You have shown you know your audience and have provided lots of insentive. Good use of the A FOREST PIE features. Mrs Spenceley

Hopes and Aspirations

By 13vickyb

As I am moving up to secondary school, I really hope to make new friends and experience something new. In addition, I would like to    be able to explore a variety of new subjects and meet different people.

One of the main things I’d like to achieve during school is to earn good grades on all my tests, including my GCSE. As a result of this, all my scores will be passed on to my college, which will help me in my future career. In order to pass all my exams, I must focus in lessons, complete all my work properly and eventually study extra at home. It is good to learn because it will become easier for you in the future.

After I finish secondary school, I am planning to go to college and university. This is because I want to expand my knowledge and, once again, experience something new.

When I finally graduate, it will be time to set off to work. My dream job is to become a famous actress who performs in musicals / fantasy films. Acting, singing, dancing and playing the piano have been my passion for a very long time now and I truly think that I deserve this job. I honestly feel passionate about my talent, and I want to continue my career professionally.

If I had the possibility, I’d also like to learn how to drive because in that way I would be able to travel where and when I like. My favourite car is probably a Porsche or a B&W. If I earn enough money, I would like to get one of these cars.

At last, I wish to owe a house and have my very own family.

Super writing, Vicky. You have used a range of sentence types and a wide range of punctuation in this writing.  You have also shown deep thinking andd a clear vision of your hopes and dreams for the future. 

Is it okay to gift someone something dangerous, if it could help them one day?

By 13vickyb

Lately, we have been looking at an image based on the story about a king gifting his children a pet dragon – which had large wings, and can breath out fire – on their 5th birthday. Not being aware of the dangers that dragons may cause, the king put up the risk and surprised the boy & girl with a dangerous pet. The king made his final decision, as he knew that one day his children will take over the throne & wanted to do the best for them. As a result, this led us to the discussion, “Is it okay to gift someone something dangerous, if it could help them one day?”

Dragons may be useful in many positive ways, and we can not reject this point. However, despite the beneficial ideas, it is mainly about the children’s safety. I disagree with having a dangerous pet because it can harm others or put them at a risk. Because of this, the fierce beast can cause a lot of accidents & prevent many disasters in the kingdom. The children are too young to deal with these creatures, and they can not handle this all by themselves. In addition, the dragon can breath out fire. This is very unsafe not only for the royal family, but also for the villagers. Due to the fiery breath, the dragon can make a catastrophe, and eventually cause deaths, which could possibly lead to an end to the kingdom. Some choices are good, whereas others bring suffering.

Dangerous pets remain a big responsibility & extra work in order to take care of it. Such a scaly dragon with large, mighty wings must be under the care of a sensible owner. Who is going to feed it? Who is going to clean after it? Who is going to take it on a walk? I consider the king himself has many other duties he must accomplish, and the children are too young to handle this beastly creature. This dangerous dragon – which was too much to handle – needs a lot of attention & involves a lot of hard work.

I truly understand that there are many positive opinions on having a pet dragon, however we must choose wisely for the safety of the children, and the good of the kingdom. Until this is denied, it is a safer option to keep the dragon away from humans. We know that children must stay protected & should stay unharmed. It would be better if the dragon lived among other dangerous creatures.

Super writing, Vicky and you have truly shown many different points in this argument and put forward your opinions in a persuasive and descriptive manner.

Perfect work!!