Right now, in different countries, adults and children are feeling blank:Streets remain in silence, friends and relatives kept separated and people not knowing what to do. Have you been like this ?In a situation like this, humans, like you and me, are trapped within walls and under roofs, feeling depressed, inactive and bored. Do you want to give up feeling like you’re being locked up in your home? If so, my product is here to help your situation. The most mysterious, most surprising and the newest invention in the business. There are hidden and unknown tasks in different pictures, that are able to keep your day busy. Are you prepared to leave the boredom behind? Are you ready to feel the happiness you once had before this pandemic?

Mystery Picture offers busy tasks, to break the boredom in lockdown. In your customised pictures, which you’ll have to discover, will be a range of tasks for you to complete. I am sure that all your appalling thoughts will start to vanish, as time goes by,But  we are here to refill your days.  We present to all people, young and old, by giving them ideas and ‘work’ to bring satisfaction in your miserable days.You can access our product by going on social media and we will deliver your personalised picture on your door step. In other words, you will see our product on beautifully designed posters that will be in your mail very soon. Some people, like you and me, could use this unique product to keep ourselves occupied during lockdown; some may want to use this product to  bring some colour and excitement into their homes. Our merchandise’s value costs £3.60, however as time moves on and numerous people make purchases, our product will improve for the better..

In the future, we, Mystery Pictures, aim to develop our product by increasing the number of tasks, making the picture light up and formulating them double sided. Without your help, we (Mystery Pictures) are unable to reach our aspirations. By purchasing our general product, you are able to make a difference in our lives and your own. From this, we are able to prepare you more fascinating pictures to decorate your home and with  your support, we can go on to the next chapter in our destiny. If you have faith in us, and if you can see our dreams ahead of us like we can then buy our product today.

Thank you for listening and giving us time.

 

Well done Hannah, although you only had a week to develop and complete your product and speech, you should be proud of your achievements. You have created an excellent product that is aimed at the current market. Your speech is informative, aimed at the audience and you have included many of the A FOREST PIE features. Mrs Spenceley

Talent

I have noticed that in the past few years, my artwork started to improve, bit by bit.Even though it might not look like how it’s suppose to look , I would add more shading to made it realistic and smudge some parts and blend it altogether.The best thing about this talent is it is very useful when planning in a lesson.In the near future, I would like to Improve my drawings so that if they are great enough, I might have a chance on becoming a designer.

I love music, as it helps to calm me down.  During bad situations it also makes me forget my surroundings.The type of music I listen to is K-pop(Korean pop) as it cheers me up, but also it makes me feel an ‘unexplainable’ feeling of happiness, since music is everything to me.

To all people including children and adults,

In order to help the hospitals,nurses and doctors,we need to stop spreading germs and stay healthy .To do this ,we must:

*Wash our hands with soap and water to prevent any bacteria to go anywhere else.

*DO NOT touch your,EYES,MOUTH and ANYBODY else * Do not COUGH or SNEEZE at other PEOPLE

*When sneezing or coughing make sure to cover your nose and mouth to make sure not to spread any germs

*Use hand sanitiser if you can’t wash your hands at that time *

The limit of time you have to wash your hands is the same as singing ‘Happy birthday to you’ twice,20 seconds

* Eat lots of fruits and vegetables that include Vitamin C

* Stay 2 meters from each other

*Dont go outside if really important

Make sure to follow these instructions.

 

Well done Hannah. A comprehensive list of things to do to stay well. I like the way you have used bullet points to illustrate each fact too.

“DON’T  HURT MY CHILD!”Slayer’s mother cried out loud .”YOU LIED TO ME ! SLAYER  WILL BECOME MORE POWERFUL THAN ME WHEN SHE GROWS UP!!”  The king yelled back furiously.”I’m sorry ..JUST DON’T HURT MY DAUGHTER “The queen shouted.” NOOOO! MAMA!”Slayer cried as something unexpected happened..”What did you do dad?YOU KILLED HER!Get ready ! I will come back and you will pay for it..”Slayer yelled with tears ..

 

“AHHHHHHH”Slayer woke up breathing heavily as she dreamt of what happened in the past .Her friend ,Lisa came in slamming the door “Are you ok?” “Yea I’m okay ” Slayer replied. ,Slayer curiously asked.”ITS YOUR 19th BIRTHDAY”Lisa happily said, while Slayer widen her eyes ,knowing that she will be 20 next year and her true power will come .Slayer decided to have a little holiday at her kingdom ,Oceana kingdom

“I will be gone for a few months ”Slayer said nervously “Where?Can I come ?” Lisa replied “ Umm I will be visiting my Mother.However she doesn’t like people that much ” Slayer said while acting.

 

A few months later at Oceana Kingdom…..”WOOOWOOOOW!” Slayer yelled as she was enjoying her self flying around like the old days, using her black wings.

Growing up was difficult for Slayer.Being a princess while learning at a mystical academy sounds easy ,but it was the opposite for Slayer .Everyone would always avoid her ,since her father ,the king  ruled the nightmare kingdom ,where all of the bad and dangerous immortals lived.

 

A few hours later , Slayer was playing with her powers while looking at the night sky .“I wonder what type of  other powers I will have …” Slayer whispered softly ,while blasting purple fire at the dark blue sky. She then decided to have a little run since she wasn’t feeling tired. As soon Slayer came out side ,she immediately turned into her wolf form. Her eyes widen quickly that her fur is not dark anymore it’s getting brighter.Slayer then arrived at the evil part of the kingdom ,where she saw her father talking about Lisa ……Slayer  then knew that Lisa is in great danger.Trying to not make a sound ,Slayer turned around quietly… When suddenly “got you ” a muscular demon said while grabbing onto Slayer’s shoulders

Slayer quickly  turned into Vampire form as her eyes turned cherry red and her barbed fangs came out.She kicked the man on the face and the shin making himself fall on the ground.Taking this opportunity,Slayer ran away using her super speed .

 

. 3 days before Slayer’s 20th b-day

 

After weeks  ,Slayer has been having nightmares about her past .

1 day before Slayers birthday

“Let me go!!”Lisa yelled as she was chained on the wall in a dungeon.“Wait  for tomorrow ” The king replied …. However the king doesn’t know it Slayers b-day..

The king told Slayer what happened…

 

The shocking news made Slayer furious that her hair turned into flames and her eyes  turned red .She rushed to the kingdom.”How dare you!!”Slayer angrily yelled with tears as her father killed Lisa in front of Slayer .With all her hatred ,h she killed the king ……..

 

I love the way you “hook” the reader into your story by using speech in a shouting style.  I do think you use too much speech throughout the story and this distracts the reader.  Read through and edit your work by taking out mos of the dialogue and replace it by describing your characters and settings and develop the action and problem in the story using powerful verbs.