THE AFTER LIFE …
Where would you go to have some peace again in your wonderful life? Please step a side and imagine the situation. The After Life… Where will your spirit cease after this glorious and memorable opportunity with your family’s and friends? Did you know having to decide whether your going to our one and only home Heaven or the unwelcoming , hair raising Hell . Hundreds of Human beings believe that the afterlife doesn’t exist but guess what they’re wrong … How would you perceive ceasing beside your valorous savior Jesus Christ . The separate person that you could give faith on in this bewildering experience .
God:you should always respect each other no matter what skin type they person has
Angels:singing in peace beside our lord christ they whispered what a place
God : children’s no matter what other people go around saying what you can and can’ t do always make the right choice please.
Devil: Don’t listen to him just do whatever you want I’ll soon be the king of everyone Hahaha
God: oh well do what you want then I know what’s best for citizens
Devil: what ever hahaha…
God : now my people it’s time for the considerable decision …It’s time to bring all the virtuous Human beings that always believed in me … The ones that always had faith and fear in what I can and can’t do .
Devil: I the king of hell during this revolution I will defeat all my enemy’s and become the most powerful king of the after life ever Hahaha
Angels:That’s what you think they acknowledged with fear
God : who do you think you are our savior asked?
Devil: I’m the king he replied
Angels: no your not . my people this is your chance to luminesce beside our lord .
About millions of people were chosen to be in our savior’s side in the shocking decision . Heaven our palace of twinkling , dazzling diamonds like crystal ice in the distance shining like golden sand above the clouds .In addition to this the devil had about 3 hundred people burning in the scorching sun burning fire and getting dangerously hurt by the hair raising “king of hell”
I really like the “hook” question into your story but frustratingly you have created a playscript with no stage directions to develop your story. You must write a story without so much speech. Also read through to correct sentence punctuation.