Marks for life (Big write)

During lockdown, people have been reading  more books: children’s books, adult’s   books and lots of cooking and baking books. That means thousand upon thousand of pages are being turned every day. Are you fed up of losing your page? Then we are the company for you. Marks for life offers you a personalise bookmark,  which is designed to improve your reading experience during this unprecedented time . How could you resist this? For sure, you would want to read your treasured classic books. For years ,this bookmark will keep your prized possessions pristine.  Hundreds of people may be thinking – how will they receive their personalise, unique  bookmarks? But that’s not a problem  at all because Marks for life will bring that happiness straight to your door step, providing something so simple but yet , so inspirational: bringing joy to your home sweet home. Some people will use this wonderful bookmark  to save their page; others will be inspired by our astonishing quotes and designs. Whether it is a gift  to someone or a treat for yourself  , we plan to provide an affordable price for all to buy. This £1.50 inspirational bookmark is something you can  not resist.

In the future, we plan to expand our company Marks for life , by developing more stationary: pencil cases , personalise pencils, rulers and some other new unique equipment. However , without your support our dreams will not come true . Buying our unique bookmarks, which are from Marks for life, will enable us to increase our profits so that we can  begin on the next chapter of our wonderful journey. I know that, with your support , Marks for life will be a global success. If you are able to see the potential of my company the way I do , together we can save thousands of lost book pages.

Thank you for listening to my speech  , together  we are strong , together we will be a global success. 

Wow Marcella! A very passionate pitch, using so many of the A FOREST PIE persuasive features. I can’t wait to hear this being read out. 

Lockdown by Marcela 📝🏡

Hi everyone 👋🏽today I’m here to talk to you about the latest COVID 19 and   our lockdown
in UK 🇬🇧.Now many people are wondering 🧐when will this disaster cease well I don’t exactly know the answer to this question right now🤔 ,but many Scientists 👩‍🔬,doctors👨‍⚕️  and nurses are working👩‍💻 very hard to try and save 🥇as much lives 🏆as possible👏, in order to stop the Corona virus 🦠 from spreading even more make sure you keep yourselfs clean especially your hands👐. But wait how do u keep your hands  Clean?🧴 To keep your hands clean please follow these information ℹ️

▪️You should wash your hands for the amounts it takes to sing 🎶 “Happy Birthday “🥳  twice (around 20seconds)

▪️wet your hands with water 💧

▪️apply enough soap  to cover your hands 🧴

▪️Rub your hands together👏
▪️Use 1 hand 🖐 to rub the back of the other hand and clean it between the fingers 🖖.Do the same for the other  Hand 🤚

▪️Rub your hands together and clean it between your fingers

▪️Rub the back of your fingers against your palms

▪️Rub your thumb using the other Hand🤚.Do the same with the other thumb 👍

▪️Rub the tips of your fingers on the palm of your hand 🖐. Do the same for the other hand 🤚

▪️Rinse your hands with water 💧

▪️Dry your hands with completely a disposable towel

▪️Use the disposable towel to turn off the tap

🔲Thank you 🙏 for reading 📖 this use full information text

🔲We will go through this together and come out this problem together ,

🔲Together  there will no longer be such a thing as COIVD 19,

🔲Thank you all for protecting us and guiding us through this tragedy

🔲Thank you NHS for all your support through this heart breaking situation 👏🙌💪🏽


Excellent work Marcela on your ideas on Lockdown.  Well done for contributing. I’d love to see you post work on Seesaw so you can carry on working and learning regularly.  If you  need help getting onto Seesaw, let the school know or send a message to me here on blogs and I can help you.  Mrs. Rawlins










LC: T12 To use character , dialogue and action to advance events in narrative writing


  Where would you go  to have some peace again in your wonderful life? Please step a side and  imagine  the situation.  The After Life… Where will your spirit cease after this glorious and  memorable opportunity  with your family’s and friends?   Did you know having to decide whether your going to our one and only home  Heaven or the unwelcoming , hair raising Hell . Hundreds of Human beings believe that the afterlife doesn’t exist  but  guess what they’re  wrong  … How would you perceive ceasing beside your valorous savior Jesus Christ . The separate person that  you could  give faith on in this bewildering experience .

God:you should always respect each other  no matter what skin type  they person has

Angels:singing in peace beside our lord christ  they whispered what a place

God :  children’s no matter what other people go around saying what you can and can’ t do always make the right choice please.

Devil: Don’t listen to him just do whatever you want I’ll soon  be the  king of everyone Hahaha

God: oh well do what you want then I know what’s best for citizens

Devil: what ever hahaha…

 God : now my people it’s time for the considerable decision …It’s time to bring all the virtuous Human beings that always believed in me … The ones that always had faith and fear in what I can and can’t do .

Devil: I the king of hell during this revolution I  will defeat all my enemy’s   and become the most powerful king of the after life ever  Hahaha

Angels:That’s what you think  they acknowledged with fear

God :  who do you think you are our savior asked?


Devil: I’m the king he replied

Angels: no your not . my people this is your chance to luminesce beside our lord .


About  millions  of people were chosen to be in our savior’s  side in the shocking decision . Heaven our palace of twinkling , dazzling diamonds  like crystal ice in the distance  shining like golden sand above the clouds .In addition to this the devil had about 3 hundred people burning in the  scorching  sun burning fire and getting dangerously hurt by the hair raising  “king of hell”


I really like the “hook” question into your story but frustratingly you have created a playscript with no stage directions to develop your story. You must write a story without so much speech. Also read through to correct sentence punctuation.