Early life

L. frank Baum was born in the 15th may 1856

at a early age l. frank Baum had a heart condition witch meant he could not play like the other kids. This meant he only had three years at military school because of the condition he had. He liked to make storeys for him and his friends. He lived in a house with his mother and his father. He also lived with some of his 4 brothers and his 3 sisters. He was one of eight children.

His jobs/Early career

l. frank Baum had multiple jobs like a employee at a locale convene store And  many other job titles as such. He also had a job at his dads theater- He even wrote his own play called “the maid of arran” a musical play.

Marriage

he was married in 1882 ton Marries Mand. her mother a head in the women’s writes march.

Mid life

His father died in 1890. making his mother and him devastated from hearing this news but he know he had to keep on going on and he crated a book called the wizard of oz  he published the wizard of oz in 1900 after his fathers death 11 years prier to the book being published after it was published he made a line in the book a quote saying ” there’s no place like home “.

 

Children

He had 4 kids frank josh Baum, rebert station Baum ,harry real Baum and kethren  gage Baum.

HE DIED 5TH MAY 1919 AGE 62

Liam Baldwin

 

 

 

 

 

 

Ansel Adams was born the 20th of February 1902.

he was famous for his photograph and despite his time when he could of got a new coloured  camera but he chose a black and white one instead. He was the one to make photograph a art form before photos were not thought as a art form but just a picture. but Ansel Adams made it the art form it is now. then it was his art form and it still is his art form. thanks to him it is now a actually art form.

 

In 1941 Ansel Adams went to lake Ellery in sierra Nevada in the picture there is the rule of thirds being used he thought the ice on the lake in the mid ground and the back ground. As well as that there is also some trees in the bottom  right corner of the photograph. And some mountains and some hills in the photograph as well in the back ground.

 

After a year, Ansel Adams created a photograph of the Canyon de Chelly national monument in Arizona there is a    semi mounting in the middle of the canyon. The canyon is wrapt around by a smooth stone witch aperies there was a river or a lake there once.

 

I liked that in the first picture there was a mounting there but I liked the massive mounting in the middle of the picture they are both very wonderful pinchers in there own way like the first picture  had a small mounting in it at the top and in the second Picture there was a huge rocky cliff in the middle of the photograph and I prefer the seconded picture because it has more in it.

 

Ansel Adams died 22nd of April 1984

Liam Baldwin

Some good use of noun phrases to describe and some different sentence structures used.

Add more details to some sentences to fully explain each point.

 

 

 

captain log
can you hear me ?
I am captain of the *static* ship
I need help on the plane, o now help me ahhhh !!!!!!
*end of log*

The ship crashed on may the 4, 2109 this is my first day hear on planet 1457 or in over words ,the star, I fond a plasma rocket and one day hear is like ten at home. I don’t know if some one else survived the crash I only survived because I was pushed in to a holding cell for crazy people what was padded. ooo no! they are corner in me!!! ow no heellp !!!!!!!!!

“o what is this. a log oo god he was killed on the spot”.said magma

a tree falls down and he runs like he finds a abandon building witch he wonders into and finds a thing of power a shell suit it only needs power “I fond it I fond it the one item we were looking for I fond the place. magma your so lucked”  

“yeah but you weren’t the first” they shoot in the air” “who are you   

“I am magma. I am from the ship that crashed roughly yester day”

then a tribe comes in and attacks with bows speers and a copal with old diner mite and they fort great but they were to out numbered so they were damaged mentally and theistically their only option was to surrender or die they chose dying raver then been eaten alive. so the stranger was shot and he slowly watch as the glass cracked and she was finally pout to rest with a fiery death and the people ran and started to eat her remains the gore was on the walls and her blood was on him the wales the ceiling as well as on the face of him and on their face’s and they approach him but their was a flash of lite and….

 

TO BE CONTINUED

A good “hook” into the story.Liam but you have overused the speech throughout to tell the story.  If you narrate the story with only a little dialogu to interest the reader but with more descriptions and character development, this would make this story more interesting. I also need you to write another 150 words to complete your story.