LC:T12 To use character, dialogue and action to advance events in narrative writing.

Maddie wasn’t like other girls. She loved blood. I know this doesn’t sound that weird but she would always having nightmares, always screaming in the night, shouting help! There was a swing in our garden, Maddie would always be outside on the swing or cutting heads off Barbie dolls.

Maddie would always tell me her nightmares. One of her nightmares were real… She would always have dreams about her dad dying on Friday 13th but coming back to life again. It was true he did.. but he will never back alive. I ever wonder if all of her nightmares are real? Lately she is having nightmares where she goes to the bathroom by herself, she comes out with someone and there is blood all over her hands. She was never nervous or scared by the nightmares that she was experiencing, it was like she wanted them to happen. 

Today was her first day at school. I felt like this would be a great opportunity for her since she had never been to school before. When she got home she said “Mum I had fun today, I got blood from lots of kids at school.” I acted like I didn’t know, since I’m a witch I can watch people whenever and wherever. I watch her throughout the whole days. 

It was the next day and she went to school all by herself. I didn’t think that it was great idea but something inside was telling me to let her do whatever she wanted. She went to the bathroom all by herself as usual but when she went in I knew that this was the day that her nightmare was going to happen. For some reason I just watched it happen without doing anything. It was like someone was controlling me. Maddie looked up and said I know your watching me mum. I have wanted to do this for ages but you would never leave me alone. I couldn’t even move to try and stop her.

I finally realised her nightmares were things that she wanted to happen. Why would she want her dad to die though? What did he ever do to her, he would always help her with everything. It looked like she was trying to summon something. Was it her dad!? I realised all that blood Maddie took from kids in her school was because she wanted to try and get her dad back. I guess her nightmares were things that she wanted to happen. But why would she have a dream that her dad dies on Friday 13th?

She came home with her dad and she apologized for everything that she had done. All she wanted was to get her dad back. Dad seemed very different, it was like he didn’t even realise me. What had she done to him and why?I asked her why did she want her dad die on Friday 13th and then just bring him back to life? She said… 


I love the “hook” into your story and the idea of a girl who loved blood is dark, ominous and very exciting.  To make the story even more exciting, introduce the idea of how dad died or how he came back to life and develop the storyline problem about this other than the many questions (one example “why would she have a dream that her dad dies on Friday 13th?)  you ask but don’t have answers to in the story.

How The Circulatory System Works

Monday 13th January 2020

LC: To sustain and develop ideas logically in non-narrative writing

How The Circulatory System Works.

The human circulatory system is made up of the heart, blood vessels (veins and arteries) and the lungs. The heart sends nutrients and oxygen to the blood. The veins will return the deoxygenated blood back to the heart. Did you know that the heart beats 100,000 times a day! The blood cells goes down the right atrium, then tricuspid valve, (it’s like a doorway) next the blood cell goes into the right ventricle, finally it goes through the pulmonary valve. Through out the journey the blood cell would give oxygen to the different parts of the body and would take some of the (CO2) carbon dioxide from the blood. After, the returning red blood cells goes through the left atrium, then the mitral valve, next it goes through the left ventricle then finally the aortic valve.

Fun Facts:

About 8 million blood cells die in the human body every second, and the same number are born each second. Within a tiny droplet of blood, the are 5 million red blood cells. If you were to lay out all of the arteries, capillaries and veins in one adult, end-to-end, they would stretch about 60,000 miles (100,000 kilometers). By comparison, the circumference of the Earth is about 25,000 miles (40,000 kilometers). That means that a person’s blood vessels could wrap around the plant approximately 2.5 times! The heart is the only muscle that works constantly and only stops after we die.


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This is a diagram of the circulatory system