Big write for dragons den

Depressed,heartbroken and wishing it was over-Do you wish that this has never happened?Across the whole world countries has been in lockdown due to Corona Virus which has been spreading around the world.Although we want to meet friends and family,we all have to stay at home.Whilst in lockdown,we can’t see our family members like grandma’s and grandpa’s or aunties and uncles.What can we do? My name is Evelyne Anenou and I have designed “game frame”.This is a device that can be used without wifi.Instead of going on your phone or iPads you could go on game frame.You could watch anything you want and play games on game frame.Even though you are using wifi when you are on your phone on game frame you don’t need wifi.So what are you waiting for!Come and try this new device!

I have designed”gameframe” that can be used for everyone.This device,which is called the gameframe ,can be used anywhere. Although it can be used everywhere, it doesn’t need wifi for you is it. It’s can come in three different colours which are red,black and white.You could watch my any tv shows,listen to music and play games to make sure you don’t use a lot of wifi at your house.The gameframe,which will be able to charge,will work by using an iPhone charger to make sure it works. This will cost £150.Anybody could be buying the gameframe as it doesn’t need wifi.What are you waiting for!Come and buy this new device!

How is this different to a iPad or phone?
Although people use an iPad or phone,you could use the “gameframe” that is something different.This gameframe doesn’t use wifi as a phone or iPad does use wifi.You might use your phone or iPad ,but with gameframe you can use it as you are not spending too much time on your phone.You could use this anytime to make sure you don’t spend too much time on your phone.
Why did you not include the option of FaceTime?
When we designed the gameframe,we considered not to have FaceTime on it.This is because there are a lot of other devices that could allow you to FaceTime a family member or friend.It was designed to play games without using any wifi.This means that you don’t waste your wifi at your house.

 

Great writing, Evelyne- as always. I can see you have clearly thought about how you would persuade the dragons and used all the English skills taught to help you.  Your product is unique and interesting and you have answered the questions carefully and thoroughly in the final paragraph. An excellent big write!

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