LC:T12 To use character dialogue and action to advance events in narrative writing

Once in the far unknown woods  lived a little boy his name Is Luke he lived with his mother and his mother name is Sue . Luke and his mother weren’t happy as his dad died when Luke was young . Luke had nothing or no one to play with, he did not even go to school . One strange night Luke had a nightmare that he got attacked by zombies. Luke kept having nightmares and he told his mum, but his mum said just ,”don’t be worried nothing will happen”. In middle of the day Luke heard a banging noise from the kitchen and he got scared so his mother went to go check and it was a plate that smashed . The window was open so Luke’s mum thought it was the plate because the window was open .

At bedtime Luke heard a whistle noise from his back garden he looked through his window and he saw a shadow moving so, he told his mum and both of them went downstairs as slowly and carefully to check what or who it was in their garden ,downstairs in the garden was only Luke’s bike which fell and reflected on his window. They went back upstairs to their bedroom Luke asked his mum if he could stay with her for the night and she said yes .

Luke tried to tell his mum all the strange sounds he had heard for the past few weeks , but his mum never believed him. Luke got told to go to his room until his dinner is made , but then his mum remembered that here  was shut so Luke had to go to the shop and get a few water bottles . On the way to the shop he saw a few guys and they were talking loud so Luke went the other way to the shop so nothing happen’s. When I reached the shop the shop keeper was giveing  me some bad and dirty looks . After I made my way home and I gave the bottles of water to my mum . Then I helped setting out the table and getting out the plates and cups . When I got the plate’s out one of them smashed.

My mum sent shops once again and this time I had to get sun flower seeds from the store . I went to the shop and on the way I saw a persons hat and shirt lying on the ground and as I walked past I heard strange sounds again. I quickly rode my bike to the store and rode it back as I was scared because I started to hear strange sounds again . On the way back I fell over and I was badly hurt blood was dripping over my trousers so I walked home while holding my bike. Then I saw random people with weapon I was petreffied .The people were coming towards me and they badly injured me I could barely walk. I got home and told my mum she plastered me .

Luke is a kind and caring boy.

Some good ideas developed in the story. To uplevel it now, add some descriptions of characters and settings in the story and develop the last two sentences to give more details about the action here.

 

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