She’s coming!
There was a family who had a strange girl.. she always screamed at night and always fell. Whispering to herself in fear, she ran outside and started sitting on the peer. Swinging her legs and humming, for others to hear.
The father went outside, seeing blood dripping from way up high. The father screamed in fear with the family running out to see their little girl gone… forever not to seen.
“HELP ME” they heard. They went up a ladder to get on the roof but hearing that noise made them think that their not alone for much longer. Running into their house was someone in fear but who was it? No one knew because they didn’t look.. but they did find a clue.
“Huh” the little boy said he saw a little black door with red. It said “come in” so the little boy followed with the parents heading to the road.
They made a mistake..
“He.. help me please” his “sister” said. The little boy knew it wasn’t his sister but he wanted to see who it really was. The little boy open the door.. and saw a shadow, he carefully walked down the hallway with spiders and webs everywhere. The door slammed behind him and the windows started to make a noise.. like something was dragging knifes across it.. The little boy was paralyzed and wondered what his parents were doing.
The parents went to the road because they tried to find another clue but they saw a car coming to them and they saw no one in the car.. when they ran of the road the car stopped.. and backed up trying to get on the pavement so the parents ran trying not to get hit.
Soon as they remember their son they ran shouting his name and went to the house to see where he was.. they couldn’t see him.. the walls started to form into the house and the little boy was trapped. As he saw the shadow again and again he ran to go get it but he fell right into the shadows trap.
Screaming in a hole the little boy tried to get out and saw a figure of a little girl standing their right above him so he tried to reach for her and grabbed her but something was off.. her face was.. cut? but how? The boy pulled his self up and looks at the girl and said “sis?” the little girl smiled and led him out side the house, her parents saw and ran to her. She took him in the road standing with him..
“M-mom!” the little boy said. While a car came crashing into the kids. The parents where shocked and heart broken their kids… gone forever….. When they left in sadness. They got stopped by someone strange?… who kicked them into a hole to bury them alive.. never to be seem again!..
HURRY GO! RUN WHILE YOU STILL CAN! SHE’S COMING FOR YOU NEXT!!!
An effective scary story with a twist at the end. Good use of different sentence starters. To uplevel the writing now, add more descriptions of places and the characters to further develop the idea of a scary atmosphere and weird or crazy people.