Hello my name is Andrei. Today I am going to show you the Anti-virus machine – this machine is made to catch the the deadliest viruses and destroy them. There are millions of them and if you use this machine, you can destroy them easily. Amazingly, this will do it by a mixture of two different liquids and 2 different gases meeting together that will make a small pop to alert you that it is gone. This machine is a lifesaving one. Don’t you want all the viruses to disappear? Then this invention is made for you.

The Anti virus was designed to be cheap for every body to buy it; it works perfectly. In 2020’s summers, we’re going to send over 3 billion of this machine all over the world. If something goes wrong, I am willing to help. And, as I said, the price is cheap: it will cost around 5-10 pounds, but the fabrication cost to make 1 million is around Β£5,000, this is because most of the things are found in nature. The design of this machine is technically a bigger camera with loads of mechanisms and chemicals inside it and a big tube coming from the front to catch the virus.If all of the chemicals and all of the gases meet together, it will take a second for the virus to disappear, and if you hear a pop then it is done. We also made this machine for blind people that can’t hear the pop, so that when it pops, a light shows.

How will your machine make the world a better place?Β 

Although we have medicine, for some of the diseases we don’t have any. Instead of taking medicines and having pain, you can just get rid of the viruses before they get to you. Also, in the future, when we are going to have millions of diseases that won’t have a cure, this machine will stop it from affecting the human population. As I was saying, this machine can save the whole world: not treating diseases, but stopping them from coming to you.

Why does it not cure the infected people?Β 

It will not cure the infected people because it has loads of chemicals and if they join in your body with the disease you can get some serious injury to your body, also because different diseases need different medicines. This is because earlier on I talked about that it makes a pop after the disease is gone, but that pop is actually a smaller explosion but still powerful, this explosion is stopped which makes it sound like a pop.

Well done Andrei! A great pitch for your invention and I can tell you have responded to the feedback you have been given throughout the week! Great use of sentence types, vocabulary and rhetorical questions!