The Journey of the water drop

The sun starts to rise as spring’s sunshine;unable to move. The ice melts, of the glaciers making my way down to join a run-off with the others.

Making my way down to form a stream was hard, joining the others in a large group to make the Tuolumne river what’s going to happen next.

We were in the Tuolumne river suddenly, we were meandering gently through the Tuolumne Meadows we were done. I thought.

Going over the Tuolumne Falls there the water has a much faster and quicker paste (danger was on the way).

we continue to flow through the Grand Canyon of the Tuolumne cascade over several different waterfalls we were tossed around up and down tumbled side to side until.

Passing through the O’shaughnessy Dam going out of the boundaries of Yosemite I don’t even know where we are now.

After leaving Yosemite we made our way across the central Valley of California where us the Tuolumne river joins with the San Joaquin River.

It then continues how long is this going to take as we went to the pathific Coast where we creates delta. Deltas formed when a river deposit sediment faster than it can be removed. They are often very fertile which means we are good for growing crops.

There’s a mouth of the San Joaquin River which lead to the pathific ocean there the water becomes part of the ocean it also carries sediment like soil and small Stones with them.

Finally we are nearly finished the last step is we are at the end of the canyon and we widened into Hetch Hetchy Reservoir

And in the water we go.

My Poems

Haiku: Planet is dying,

               Land of trees are vanishing,

               This can’t carry on











Trees being cut down,

Madagascar is bleeding,

Life of animals being destroyed,

This Stops Now!



Turning into houses

Rude people cutting down trees

Echoes all around

Every tree loss means a animal loss

Saving trees is our problem


Thank you, Thomas for these descriptive poems. To uplevel these, make sure you are punctuating each line correctly with either a comma or a full stop (to complete a verse and for your kenning poem, could you change some lines so they show alliteration? 


Home-Learning 16/11/20 – Deforestation Poetry


Planet is dying (5)

Land of trees are vanishing (7)

This can’t carry on (5)









Trees being cut down,

Madagascar is bleeding,

Life of animals being destroyed.


Trees soul dying and falling like a broken tower,

Regret what you’re doing to earth

Every tree being cut down causes more danger

Every tree being cut down causes more life loss

Stop, this is World War 1 in deforestation style


Some excellent descriptions, Liam and I can see you are using similes to describe. Check the syllables in your cinquain and remember the pattern and theme for each line. Also, add commas at the end of each line for each poemand a full stop to complete each verse. 


Deforestation Poems – Big Write

Trees disappear

Madagascar is bleeding

Make a change now


Leaf – loser

Tree – taker







Spreading across

Animals losing homes

You can still make a change

So join


Did you know

Everyone should be involved

Forests are dying

Overly disappointing

Really as if no one cares

Every tree matters

So are we going to stop

Trees are what we need to live

And we need to do something about it

Trees waving until they get cut down

It’s killing our world

Of burnt ashes

Need trees to survive, you need to start caring before it’s too late


Never ignore the fact this is happening

Every time trees get cut down

Everything is disappearing and we don’t want that

Dead is rising to the point where it’s too much

See, forests needs to live


Time is running out but you can still do something about it

On the trees where animals live are now gone


So join the army to stop this

To end all of this and continue on living

Own the victory of fighting and joining the army

People will join and you can to.


Super poetry Elise and I particularly love your acrostic poem. It reads like a chant to change the world- very well done. For each poem, can you make sure you are punctuating these with a comma at the end of each line and a full stop at the end of the verse. Also go back through your cinquian poem, making sure you follow the rules for syllables in each line.

As an uplevelling target, could you add some more lines to your kenning poem, but make these alliterations as well?


Kenning (Attack On Titan)







Nice kenning poem. Is this Thor, by any chance???

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