Lc: to use different sentence structures depending on the formality of writing

Introduction
Have you ever wandered how crimes and punishments have changed through the centuries? In this text, there will be details of crimes and consequences throughout the Roman era to modern Britain. Further back in history people have always committed crimes and been given punishments. Theft is the most common crime of all throughout all the centuries, even now.

Crime and punishments in the Roman times

The Roman Empire ruled most of the world, during 500bc to 400ad. Rome was horrible and a dirty place too live in. That is why there was so many crimes. Murder and theft became the most common crimes in the city. More serious crimes the more horrible the punishments are; buried alive ,thrown of a cliff and having your limbs cut off. There was not any police but they did have Vigles. They would take you too the king if you did something bad. Also, they had wooden shoes and wooden planks that went around their necks, so it would be hard for them to escape.

Anglo Saxon period

Still, the two top crimes are murder and theft. Even though, treason was the worst crime. If you committed these crimes you had too have you limbs cut off, death and fines. If you committed treason you would be stretched. They were actually called the racks. There were not any police. Although,  ‘Tithings’ were a group of 10
men. Hey would chose and capture anyone if they think they are a suspect. They were kind of the police though.

Tudor period

In the Tudor times, stealing or theft was the most common crime. If you committed any crimes here are the main punishments that you would get; whipping, scolds bridle, branded, stocks and executions. Parish constables were people who would have too keep the place at peace. So, if anyone was to do a small crime you would still have a horrible crime. They would also take you to the king.

victorian period

Again, stealing was the most common crime . although, pick pocketing was the second most common crime. If you committed any of these crimes you would have to be punished by transportation, court or prison. In 1829, the police department was introduced peelers after Robert red. By 1833, it became a crime not to send your child or children to school.

ww2 (world war 2 ) period

Robbery was the most common crime at the time.  Although, stealing was still around. If you committed any of these crimes these would be your punishments the black market, death prison or a really big fine. If you wanted to know, there was police around through world war 2. Also, ww2 killed over 6 billion people.

roman

Anglo Saxon


tudor

victorians


world war 2

Some good facts in this writing, Hope however I need you to add more factual details to each and every section.  For Year 6 writing expectation, you have much more detailed writing in your skills book. 

How are mountains are formed?

Introduction
Have you ever wondered how mountains are formed? Although, mountains are formed over millions of years, they are all completely diverse. There are four different types of mountains; block, dome, fold and volcanic. Block mountains are created by the earths crust being pushed up in big folds or pushed up or down in blocks. Constantly, the weather wears the rocky surface away and leaves the mountain jagged.

Block mountains start to form after a Slab of land breaks apart. Then it is formed up as two of the Earth’s tectonic plates pull apart or pushed together( this is called a fault.) A fault line is lines that breaks the ground apart.

Dome mountains
Dome mountains are occur when the liquid rock inside the Earth, which forces the ground above it upwards, forms over the top. This swelling but does not break through the surface. Molten rock helps the Earth push up ,to make a dome shape.

Fold mountains

Fold mountains are the most common types of mountains. The plates push forward slowly over the years (they are 50 million years old.) Many mountain ranges are much older, such as the Himalayas.

Plateaus

Plateaus are flat areas of land found in high places. When a mountain is formed, blocks of Earth can fall and lift next to each other to produce a high mountain and a lower plateau.

 

You have included topic specific vocabulary and a variety of punctuation.   What other details could you add using clauses?  MR